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 Title: In my hand, a pocket book edition of the Norwegian Free Culture book!
 Tags: english, docbook, freeculture
-Date: 2015-08-19 22:00
+Date: 2015-08-19 22:10
 
-<p>Today, finally, my first printed edition of the Norwegian version
-of Free Culture arrived in the mail.  I had to to fake some cover to
-get the interior printed, and the exterior of the book look awful.
-But that is irrelevant at this point.  I asked for a printed pocket
-book version to get an idea about the font sizes and paper format as
-well as how good the figures and images look in print.  After
-receiving the 500 page pocket book, it became obvious to me that that
-pocket page size is too small for this book.  I believe the book is
-too thick, and several tables and figures do not look good in the size
-they get with that small page sizes.  I'll go with the 5.5x8.5 inch
-size instead.  A surprise discovery from the paper version was how bad
-the URLs look in print.  They are very hard to read in the colophon
-page.  The URLs are red in the PDF, but light gray on paper.  I need
-to change the color of links somehow to look better.  But there is a
+<p>Today, finally, my first printed draft edition of the Norwegian
+translation of Free Culture I have been working on for the last few
+years arrived in the mail.  I had to fake a cover to get the interior
+printed, and the exterior of the book look awful, but that is
+irrelevant at this point.  I asked for a printed pocket book version
+to get an idea about the font sizes and paper format as well as how
+good the figures and images look in print, but also to test what the
+pocket book version would look like.  After receiving the 500 page
+pocket book, it became obvious to me that that pocket book size is too
+small for this book.  I believe the book is too thick, and several
+tables and figures do not look good in the size they get with that
+small page sizes.  I believe I will go with the 5.5x8.5 inch size
+instead.  A surprise discovery from the paper version was how bad the
+URLs look in print.  They are very hard to read in the colophon page.
+The URLs are red in the PDF, but light gray on paper.  I need to
+change the color of links somehow to look better.  But there is a
 printed book in my hand, and it feels great. :)</p>
 
 <p>Now I only need to fix the cover, wrap up the postscript with the